How Can I Make a Thesis Statement Out of This Info?

Question by Amer: How can I make a thesis statement out of this info?
I want to have these 3 things in my thesis
-Victor’s dad is a victim of American soceity
– Therefore, he becomes an alcoholic
– Because he became an alcoholic he leaves his family even if this was rare for a man to do in his Native American culture.

How to tie all of these things together?

Best answer:

Answer by Izzy
Remember a thesis statement isn’t just information put out there, but there are several things a good thesis statement needs

1- It actually need to say something important (i.e. “purple is a color” would not be a good thesis statement)

2- It need to state something debatable or you need to take a stance on an issue (i.e. “Health care reform is a hot topic of debate” would not be a good thesis statement)

3- Your thesis statement should be the ONE idea you wish to leave your reader with. If you have to choose just one idea of your paper or argument what idea is the most important? (ie a thesis statement of “band aids can be helpful” when trying to argue that more attention need to be paid to infections when addressing major cuts)

So with that in mind I hope you can create a better thesis statement than anyone else can, because only you know what point you want to get across. However, just to answer your question I’ll try some goes at your thesis statement.

I- Even though it is highly uncommon for native Americans to abandon their family, Victor’s Father (I would insert his actual name instead of his title) did so due to his alcoholism.

II- Due to his unfortunate situation Victors father was determined to become a alcoholic which would ultimately influence him to abandon his family.

After trying to create a thesis statement with those points, I realized you may be trying to express too many ideas. It seems to me your trying to state three separate ideas at once. I would think about only trying to express one or combine two into one. For example “Victors decision to abandon his family was due to his alcoholism” to me sounds like a much stronger, direct, and concrete thesis statement. You might want to explain how he was a victim of society as well.

Well I hope that helps

Good Luck!

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